1.) Before: While doing multiple different activities, your focus is not on one single activity but instead on both at the same time.
After: While doing multiple different activities your focus isn’t on one activity, instead it’s on both.
2.) Before: Restak gives an example of this, talking about a scenario where someone on the talking to their friend on the phone is having trouble focusing on driving in deteriorating conditions as well.
After: Restak gives an example of this, a scenario where someone talking on the phone is also having trouble focusing on driving in deteriorating conditions.
3.) Before: Older generations didn’t have as much technology to distract them while they were still developing, so their brains could have a harder time getting used to this new abundance of information.
After: Older generations didn’t have as much technology distracting them while developing, so they may have trouble adjusting to this new abundance of information.
4.) Before: Attention Deficit Disorder (ADD) and Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD) have both become very common in today’s world, with characteristics of the two disorders now being considered ordinary behavior in society.
After: Attention Deficit Disorder (ADD) and Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder (ADHD) have become very common today, with characteristics of the two now being considered ordinary behavior.
5.) Before: Before you know it, you are multiple websites away from where you started, and what you’re looking at has nothing to do with the original page you were looking at.
After: Before you know it, you are multiple websites away, and what you’re looking at has nothing to do with the original page.
I think you did some fantastic work here! So many of these sentences seem stronger!